This is my film review of Metropolis (1927) by Fritz Lang, where I focused around the subject of gender and how each was shown throughout the run of the film.
A couple of little pointers for this review - firstly, the dreaded apostrophe! Nit-picking I know, but just proof read before posting ...you have a couple of omissions, 'Marias important presence' and 'Freders world' for example.
From a presentation point of view, I would suggest not wrapping the text around the images, but making the images bigger and centralising them. This makes it easier to read the text, and lets the reader have a good look at the image.
Be wary of using quotes from blogs; it is very likely that the article was written by another student, and really you need to be using more recognised and reputable sources - always go back to the home page and get a feel for how scholarly the source is! Don't worry about editing this review, just take the advice forward to the next one!
What impresses here is your commitment to writing and shaping a written text - this is clearly not a 'dashed off' response and it shows. I think you give too much time perhaps to the plot synopsis here - beware giving your energy to re-writing the plot of a film; keep your synopses short and sweet. I like all the analysis of the scenes you give here, but my overall impression is you need to tighten up your focus a bit: this review could be shorter and more focused. That said, you're clearly seeking to use your quotes proactively and reflect on their content. It's clear that a '1000 word count' is not going to be any issue for you, so where I want you to concentrate your efforts next time is on making your analysis evidence-rich and pushing your reading around the subject a little harder. Very encouraging however :)
Hi Shannon!
ReplyDeleteA couple of little pointers for this review - firstly, the dreaded apostrophe! Nit-picking I know, but just proof read before posting ...you have a couple of omissions, 'Marias important presence' and 'Freders world' for example.
From a presentation point of view, I would suggest not wrapping the text around the images, but making the images bigger and centralising them. This makes it easier to read the text, and lets the reader have a good look at the image.
Be wary of using quotes from blogs; it is very likely that the article was written by another student, and really you need to be using more recognised and reputable sources - always go back to the home page and get a feel for how scholarly the source is!
Don't worry about editing this review, just take the advice forward to the next one!
Thank you Jackie, I will do next time! :)
ReplyDeleteWhat impresses here is your commitment to writing and shaping a written text - this is clearly not a 'dashed off' response and it shows. I think you give too much time perhaps to the plot synopsis here - beware giving your energy to re-writing the plot of a film; keep your synopses short and sweet. I like all the analysis of the scenes you give here, but my overall impression is you need to tighten up your focus a bit: this review could be shorter and more focused. That said, you're clearly seeking to use your quotes proactively and reflect on their content. It's clear that a '1000 word count' is not going to be any issue for you, so where I want you to concentrate your efforts next time is on making your analysis evidence-rich and pushing your reading around the subject a little harder. Very encouraging however :)
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