Well done - I think you've pretty much got it. The trick here is going to be exploiting montage and creative ways to flip between the recordings etc to really speed things along. For example, are you truly going to have screen time to show the daughter sending her mum a PDF - very specific! I also think there are opportunities to ensure in the mise-en-scene of the bedroom that there's lots of stuff to tell us about a) her mum's job role/achievements/importance and b) the closeness of their relationship etc. You need to look for as many visual ways to get this relationship on screen so we can feel it. I like the ending too - nice - so script it now using the conventions on the Toy Story extract and start thinking too about art direction ideas and character design etc. Onwards!
OGR 23/01/2019
ReplyDeleteHey Shannon,
Well done - I think you've pretty much got it. The trick here is going to be exploiting montage and creative ways to flip between the recordings etc to really speed things along. For example, are you truly going to have screen time to show the daughter sending her mum a PDF - very specific! I also think there are opportunities to ensure in the mise-en-scene of the bedroom that there's lots of stuff to tell us about a) her mum's job role/achievements/importance and b) the closeness of their relationship etc. You need to look for as many visual ways to get this relationship on screen so we can feel it. I like the ending too - nice - so script it now using the conventions on the Toy Story extract and start thinking too about art direction ideas and character design etc. Onwards!